I don't think it's possible to upload a document as such directly to this blog, and I didn't really want to have to reformat my paper so that it would work here, so here is a link to my first draft, in Google Doc form.
See it here.
If you have a chance, look over it. Let me know what you think.
First off great work! Next, you should let viewers comment directly on the Google document, it is just easier! I'll probably end up telling you a lot of this in class but I'll say it here anyways! To help you get in length range, I would try and shorten examples, and explanation. Remember your main audience consists of two wise and knowledgeable professors, but even engineering majors such as myself, have enough understanding of how the patronage system works and how it might cause censorship for more in depth reasoning to be appropriate. Also, I only took a brief glance, but you don't seem to feature much contrary opinion, probably something to think about!
ReplyDeleteI like the style of your paper. It has a nice voice to it.
ReplyDeleteTwo constructive comments:
1) It would help me visually if the verse were indented a bit. My little brain gets confused with imbalanced paper.
2) All of your support is about Shakespeare you might consider either focusing your thesis or finding some more examples about other people.